T1 Writing

We are learning to...

·      write a personal recount about something we have done or experienced

Criteria:

·      have an opening statement that tells who, what and where

·      write the events in the order they happened

·      have a conclusion or personal response

Playing Soccer

On Wednesday Room 3 went to soccer. We played Break the Ice and if you are too close, you break the ice. And if you went outside the cones you were a chaser and then you will try to get the ball off the players. And the girls were separated from the boys and it was at Oaklands School. I was happy because we won the soccer game.

Teacher comment:

You have tried hard to have all the parts of a recount.

Next steps.

Try to add some extra details and try not to use so many "and"s.